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MoldyBrain
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PostSubject: A Plea To The Moon   Fri Aug 13, 2010 1:47 pm

a one-shot :)

here

please be kind
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PostSubject: Re: A Plea To The Moon   Fri Aug 13, 2010 7:33 pm

I love it, but hate it, but love it!! From a YuroSoi point, I hate that Soifon dies! But from a writers point, its so simply written that it couldn't be written any better. It doesn't go into details, (as to like why Soi died) but because of it's simplistic nature, it just draws you in!! I call that an instant SUPER FAN!!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: A Plea To The Moon   Fri Aug 13, 2010 9:02 pm

aww, thanks dude. ^ that totally made my day :) Adore
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PostSubject: Re: A Plea To The Moon   Fri Aug 13, 2010 9:27 pm

I couldn't believe my eyes when I saw that this was your first fanfiction. This was very well written and made me sad. Which in case of angst fics is a good thing.

I really think you should consider entering it into the Angst Challenge.
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PostSubject: Re: A Plea To The Moon   Fri Aug 13, 2010 10:57 pm

^ sorry for making you sad Neutral about entering it... nah XD
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PostSubject: Re: A Plea To The Moon   Sat Aug 14, 2010 12:52 am

This certainly is an interesting piece.

I appreciate that you left a lot of this to the readers imagination. Character death is a tricky issue. Too little detail and it looses it's effect; too much and it comes off a self-indulgent.

However, I do feel that this fic's greatest strength is also it's weakness. It's minimalistic to the point of almost being abstract. I never really felt like a had a grasp on things. It made for an interesting read from a stylistic point of view, but it was also a bit frustrating that I never really felt like I knew what exactly was going on.

Unless that was what you were going for. If that's the case, then this is spot on and good work.

Either way it's a strong showing for your first fic and I hope to see more.

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PostSubject: Re: A Plea To The Moon   Sat Aug 14, 2010 5:23 am

Glad to have made your day, and definitely hope to see more by you in the future!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: A Plea To The Moon   Sat Aug 14, 2010 11:03 am

Short but good. Very good for your first fanfiction, actually. Keep up the good work. ^_^
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